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When I saw her for the first time sitting in her terrace, right adjacent to mine with a cup in hand, she looked like a mannequin – only a lot older. Two mahogany chairs adorned her spotless terrace on one of which she was sitting in a trance. A light paisley maxi dress, newspaper neatly folded in her lap and a slight smile playing on her lips. Her shiny salt pepper hair were effortlessly falling on her shoulders and her eyes were transfixed at a spot down there, somewhere, which was hard to locate given the 12th floor balcony I was standing in. I just moved in to this new apartment and was still getting used to the idea of high rise. I had always lived in houses – the ones with the lawns and space right inside the house to park. The ones that had a gate and a little walk before you could open the main door. And people, could not peak into your house even if they wanted to.
But that’s not how it was here. I was looking at someone who was having a quite cup of tea and I… I could probably read the headlines of the newspaper in her lap with little effort. I was intruding.
Before I could refocus on the work at hand, which was btw arranging the sea of boxes so that I could call this little space a home, she moved a bit readjusting herself in her chair and in the process looked at me. I immediately turned my back and pretended to fix the mess. I was cursing myself for doing whatever I did in the last two minutes -staring at her and then for lack of words, turning my back.
Suddenly I heard a voice, a little loud but sweet voice saying, “Hi Dear. Good Morning.” And it was coming from behind.
I turned around to find her looking at me with a smile. I reciprocated with the most pathetic grin giving away how awkward I was feeling.
“Good morning”, I said nodding my head feeling completely busted.
“You new here?” she asked putting her cup down while bending all the way to the floor. I could see she was having difficulty but her eyes, the warmth in the words and that smile were that of a 20 year old – fresh, full of enthusiasm and intrigue.
From someone like me whose sense of real conversation was very different from yelling of a 12th floor balcony, she still managed to pull out a few words.
“Yes, just shifted.” I responded in a hesitant but composed voice.
“So what’s your good name!” she asked.
“Avantika”, I said completely sure of the fact that our conversation was being heard by all the houses down below.
“How about calling you Avi?” she was smiling.
I looked at this woman I just met, okay saw, five minutes before and she wanted to cut short my name! I was used to this from my age group people but never someone who was old enough to be my granny. They were never interested.
“Avi is good. My friends call me so.” It was more out of respect than anything else.
“Avi it is then! And I hope to become your friend”, the smile was constantly there.
“I am Nausheen but for you N. That’s what my friends call me”, she was still smiling and letting me in her territory. Only that I was hesitant and confused.
In a new city where I was about to start my corporate climb, could I be friends with someone so easily whom I didn’t know except sharing a word or two or an awkward glance and that too who was approximately thrice my age? Or could I?
Next day I felt compelled at the same morning hour to be there, to see her, mostly to see her there. And there she was – in the same pose with the same cup and the same vibrant smile.
Getting up in the mornings was easy thereafter. We would have our cups of tea together in our own terraces sharing tidbits and then I would rush in to get ready for my day ahead. May be her presence was the reason I would get up an hour early and stand out there breathing in the city and the warmth I so missed in an empty apartment that I came back to every night.
The mornings were different.
I would tell her about the boss, the grueling ‘man kill man’ tendency, the work, the handsome guys, the bitchy girls and the fewer of few friends I had started to make. I did most of the talking and she, she did what many couldn’t. She listened and once in while threw in the pearls of wisdom that made me wonder how her life was when she was as young as me.
One Saturday when there was no hurry to get back into the race of time and we were as usual having our mandatory cups of tea pulling the chairs as close as possible to each other at the remote corners of our terraces, she said “You know I had a daughter just like you!”
“Really?” I was shocked and embarrassed that I never asked her about who all were integral to her life.
“But she is long gone now. Living in States with her husband and kids. She also used to yammer like you and fill me in with her college and office gossip.” She grinned.
“The strange thing is I don’t miss her that much.”
I felt clueless at the confession. Today I was listening and I didn’t know what to say to someone who was now pouring her heart out.
“But I miss my best friend…. It was not her, it was my husband. ” she continued with a distant gaze.
“Where is he?” I blurted out almost suddenly. I realized only after hearing my own voice that this was not how I should have asked.
There was embarrassed silence between us.
But it was only me who was embarrassed.
She pointed her finger to the sky and looked deep into the clouds that were building up and fogging her vision. Little drops of drizzle wetted her cheeks. It was hard to tell whether it was the God churning the clouds or her own eyes.
“An year back”, she said, “He was here and we used to have our morning tea together sitting right here” she patted the seat of the other chair that always lay there empty. She looked at me and now I noticed the dark circles around her eyes and the emptiness that probably she always felt but didn’t let it surface. There was always a curtain of love, almost always.
“Could I hold life by its throat and give it a good shake asking her to get back into my husband? I couldn’t Avi… I couldn’t.” she said helplessly. “He slumped into darkness right in front of my eyes and I just kept shaking his body….. wake up, wake up…. But he didn’t.”
She continued after a long pause.
“Exactly an year back, I had my first morning cup of tea all alone with an empty chair for company. He was not there – neither were his guffaws nor the ever ringing laughter that filled my house all day long. He laughed even when he didn’t know where his next breath would come from. And then it was suddenly so quiet that I could hear my heartbeat that was heavy, painful and…. waiting.”
I was still sinking my teeth into the words that were flowing out of her like an untamed river. The worst thing is silence hanging on a conversation that is too delicate. I wanted to say something but I was choking on the words. Clearly she wasn’t.
“The emptiness is unbearable”, she got up from her chair and went closer to the railing.
“I wish I hadn’t met you though”, she looked at me and there were sadness and a smile appearing through clouds on her face. In a moment, it all vanished and there was just blankness and a weird determination that made me dizzy.
I immediately got up from my chair and asked “Why N?”
Her sudden closeness to the railing and that determination was sparking chill signals in me.
“It is not as easy as it was 15 days ago.” She peeped down and stepped on to the parapet. My heart almost skipped a beat.
“Okay okay listen N. I know it sucks”, I almost jumped in my pants saying this. I knew if I wasted time getting to her apartment, I would lose her.
“I miss him Avi. I have nothing now. Nothing to lose because I have already lost the most important thing in my life.”
“N. I can’t say I know or I understand. But I know what I would feel if you won’t be here tomorrow. It will suck. But you just don’t stop living. Are you listening to me N? ”
She was looking down as if she was possessed and something was pulling her down there.
“Look at me N, look at me….” I yelled but still couldn’t get her to see me.
“You… you just don’t stop living” I said with a definite pause to make her notice.
“He wouldn’t have wanted you to give up. He didn’t N. He didn’t. He was laughing till his last breath … for you, not for himself.”
I paused to see her reaction. Her face contorted and I said calming myself, “Come on now, step back. We are too close.”
She stepped back. She heaved out a difficult breath and broke down while kneeling on the floor.
It felt as if a heavy stone just got lifted off my heart. I blinked back my tears and ran towards her apartment.
Oh, God, What a sense of relief! Jas you made me run through the lines. You are surely a gifted writer. I shudder what if……..
Thanks Meenakshi. I am glad you could feel the chill too.
You know what is worser than being totally alone with yourself – Being filled with people around you, and still feeling all alone inside.
Destination Infinity
PS: Good to see the story end positively. It’s different.
I agree DI. Feeling alone inside is worst whether there are people around you or not.
Thanks DI. I am glad you liked it.
You have captured brilliantly the loneliness and the despondency of those who lose their partners who they’ve lived with and loved for so many years. It is possible for them to form meaningful relationships with others, but the vacuum is always there.
Thanks Corinne. I didn’t know if managed to do that. So I am really happy to read your comment.
It is indeed and life is meaningful only when your partner is with you. But again you have to live and learn to deal with it.
Superb build-up to the climax, Jas, loved it! Great story, enjoyed reading it!
Thanks chattywren
I thought she would have jumped as such people are not prone to listen.But you gave a good turn.I liked your narration immensely
Thanks Mr. KP
My character N is otherwise full of life. It is just the loss of partner that is driving her for such insanity so I think that’s why she listened.
Atleast that’s how I thought of the character.
What a lovely story! It had me on the edge of my seat till the very end.
Describes the lonelineless in the midst of plenty in city life beautifully. Well done!
Thanks TGND
I am glad you could get what I was trying to convey.
lovely story Jas.. i was struck till the end.. wanted to scream and stop her going further near the railing.. superb narration..
Thanks AM. I am happy that it could create that effect for you.
Somehow, this story reminded me of this advertisement: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0aqpz2sqUKE
I think the couple in this ad and in your story would be very similar.
ha ha
brings a smile, this ad, isn’t it!
It is not easy to jump off a 12 story building. You have to be really insanely depressed to do that. For a second, I thought she won’t stop but thankfully, she found her anchor.
I think she had her moment of weakness where all the fears just seem small in front of the pain. Did you feel there was a conflict of character here?
Thanks Amit
I think N did not come across as someone who will take the drastic step. Sad but not crazy. But then neither did the guy who shot 20 schoolchildren in U.S. came across as crazy to people who knew him.
I guess we should not go by the calmness on one’s face.
ya that’s what I thought when I created N’s character in my mind. Calmness is deceiving at times.
Wow.. a lovely play of words and emotions. Great story Jas!
Loneliness is difficult and it takes you to the heights of just wanting to free oneself.
Like N, everyone has a story and each day each one has to fight it out… that’s life..
Thanks M
What is important is fighting out and finding an anchor that N did in Avi.
All right! That went through me as lightening! I was readying for a long haul though.
I guess it ended too soon. Got to work on that part.
I like being alone but I hate it when I’m lonely. Loneliness is perhaps the biggest punishment for man. There is nothing that could fill the void and the emptiness! Nice story
Thanks Ashwini
Ya loneliness kills, may not in person but it definitely kills the spirit.
I did not get a right word after reading the story, Jas. It is a beautiful story wonderfully written. You definitely write realllyyyyy good
Isn’t loneliness one of the scariest things in life?
It is indeed latha. It scares me to death. I can’t imagine my life without the few people I totally depend on for my emotional health.
Thanks Latha
It was racy, began cheerfully and then suddenly became dark. I was crossing my fingers that Avi is able to save her. Loneliness is so cruel
. Beautifully penned, Jas. My heart was in my mouth.
Thanks Rachna… I tried to do that here and i am glad it worked for you.
Loneliness is cruel and unforgiving…
Thank god you saved her !
I didn’t.. my character in the story Avi did
Beautifully narrated Jas, the emotions and the despair of being lonely is brought out so nicely I actually shuddered as I read the last few lines….loved it!
Thanks so much PT
life is like that, springing surprises isn’t it!
That is powerful writing!! Losing a parther of many years is indeed painful but glad that she was willing to listen to Avi
Thanks Bhagya. Great to hear that from you
It is and I think she listened because she wanted a guardian angel around her.
Very sad, poignant tale superbly told!
Thanks Rosh. Sad it is but a reality of times.
Touching story Jas! loved the style of narration,the sweet beginning, the sad and unexpected twist and the positive ending!
“I can’t say I know or I understand. But I know what I would feel if you won’t be here tomorrow.” loved the line.. One can empathise and sympathise but not actually understand what pain another is going through. And sometimes a bond created with a perfect stranger is so much heart warming.
Thanks Seena. I just imagined myself in the situation and words flowed but I guess the flow should have been more
Jas , this was i dont know… . You know this brought a bad memory, I was in second year college then and we had given our upstairs on rent.. I use to sleep out in the lawn , one day the little son of the lady upstairs , came and woke me up and said mum is not opening the door..
I was only a young man then, and did not know what to do , I went upstairs and t ocut the story short I broke the door and there she was Dead., I did not know what to do, just the other day I was talking to this aunty as she wanted some things fetched from the shop.. Her husband lived in USA, she was herself a Doctor and a top one too.
she used to be so happy , I did not talk that much with her, and i have forgotten her face also now , but whenever I met her she use to smile , ask me about my college , studies and all.. I could never have thought she would take this extreme step, dont know what the problem was or why she did it , leaving her two minor kids she took that step..
But the calmness on the face, is not the true picture of what is going on in that mind ..
Sad very sad that happened .. BUT Avi did the right thing , she saved a person from taking that step..
Oh God. It must have been a fainting sight. Though I don’t understand what prompts people to the edge but there are many who do that without thinking about the consequences. They give up – on life, on love and finding happiness in little things.
God bless the soul.
Very very beautifully portrayed Jas. Face is not the index of the mind, not always and not in all definitely.
I loved the little details, the mahogany chairs, the floor, the conversation, the shortening of names – they all seem to be shared so effortlessly.
One gets caught under so many layers that it is hard to look beyond and within.
I am a sucker for happy endings (happy in my way) and loved this. Absolutely
Happy in my way too
Glad you noticed the little details. Thanks so much Toffee.
And btw where are you these days? busy busy?
God knows why..I felt the story would have a comic ending..I know I look an idiot now
But glad to see its not a tragic story
Loneliness is brutal. Who have suffered or are suffering know it the best. But life comes to you once and you need to respect it and enjoy it.
I liked the way you described the morning tea setup
what
and I am surprised.
Thanks Visha
It is brutal and pushes people to the brink.
God! You had me!!!
That was an amazing narration….
Thanks Smita
Compelling tell, Jas. Well done.
Thanks Nancy. I am really glad you liked it :0)